Freedom
tastes like a steaming hot plate of fresh salmon with a crispy caramelized top,
washed down with a cool glass of Orangina.
It feels like a cool breeze blowing away the beads of sweat on your
forehead and plush, cushioned seats to rest your tired legs on after a day of
travel. Freedom sounds like the buzz of
foreign accents and the clash of plates meeting a table. It smells like the urban scent of a busy city
street and the culmination of several meals wafting together to create an
aromatic blend of flavors and spices.
It was the
summer after my junior year of high school.
I looked up at the hot sun that was melting my friends and me as we
scrambled to find a café during our hour-long lunch break. We squeezed our way through the streets of Paris
that were packed as tightly as a too small pair of jeans. The café had to meet three basic requirements:
it had to be reasonably priced, large enough to accommodate eight people, and
it had to be close because I really had to use the bathroom.
The walls
of the café were covered in floating fabrics that shimmied in the wind. Although there wasn’t much separating the
inside and outside of the building, it was incredibly dim. I relaxed my tired legs on a comfortable seat
between my friends Nolan and Deanna.
The shade of the café combined with the openness of the layout created
the perfect warm, breezy temperature for our hour-long break from the chaos of
trying to fit as many touristy activities into one vacation as possible. It was our fourth day on the trip and we all
were drunk off the intoxicating concoction of exhaustion mixed with thrill.
The feeling
of traveling in a foreign country for the first time is one that is impossible
to predict. Growing up I had gone as far
as Florida but that had been the extent of my voyages. The same could be said for my parents. Going as far as Europe seemed like a far off
dream that would only happen once I was old and rich. But when my principle announced he would
planning a trip to France and Italy and my parents said I could go if I got a
job and paid for part of my trip, this far off dream became my imminent
reality. Not only would I be spending
two weeks on another continent, I was going with seven of my closest
friends. It was more than I ever thought
I could possibly hope for.
I skimmed
the short menu as the server went around taking everyone’s orders. I quickly decided on the salmon and a bottle
of Orangina: a carbonated orange drink that tastes like a thirst quenching
glass of orange flavored Pop Rocks. In
France, people go out to eat and take their time enjoying the meal not only for
wonderful food but also for the ritualistic act of coming together and sharing
the experience. So instead of acting on
my American impulses and complaining that it took thirty minutes for my salmon
to come to the table, I sat back and slowly enjoyed my delicious and refreshing
Orangina while laughing with my friends.
When my food did finally arrive I had forgotten I had been waiting for
it in the first place. I hadn’t been
expecting much from the meal, just something to fill me up.
It was the
best thing I had ever tasted. The fish
was tender and juicy with a caramelized top that gave the perfect crunch so
that when you bit into it, the texture was indescribable. I had a flashback to watching Jimmy Neutron
as a young girl; the episode where he is able to create the perfect piece of
candy, somehow combining textures and flavors perfectly to create a candy so
good the people of Retroville became addicted. That is what this salmon tasted
like. It was just salty enough to
exquisitely compliment the sweet top layer.
I couldn’t get enough of it.
There is something about the perfect meal that brings out your inner
animal. It kept telling me to devour the
caramelized treasure that lie before me and lick the plate clean. But with every ounce of restraint I
possessed, I instead slowly savored every sweet, juicy, salty, crunchy bite and
washed it down with the contained sunshine that is Orangina.
Now
whenever I am asked what my favorite meal I’ve ever had is I describe that
moment. But the more I think about it,
the more I realize it is all a lie. The
salmon could never have been that perfect.
I have had Orangina plenty of times in my life and never had it tasted
as good as it did in that moment. The
thing is, I wasn’t just eating this meal.
As much as I tasted that salmon on my tongue, I was feeling the sweat
from a long day of wandering the streets of Paris glide down my back. I was listening to my best friends talk about
the mind-bogglingly amazing adventures we had just experienced. I was watching Parisians walking past the
open spaces of the very first real café I had ever eaten in. I tasted more than a perfectly prepared fish;
I was tasting freedom for the first time.
And let me tell you, it tastes damn good.
Hey Emma,
ReplyDeleteWhat a wonderful reflection on your experience. I can taste the salmon with you and feel your excitement. There a few run on sentences, but nothing a little editing can't fix. I love how the color orange is interwoven into your story through the salmon and the awning (?). Good work all around.
Emma, the beginning of your piece is, for me, close to perfection. The accurate description of what is freedom for you is just amazing. But then, I feel like a decrease of narrative tension (of course, how could you keep that powerfulness along 1000 words?). Maybe would this part fit better at the very end of your piece ? The essay is otherwise well-written. And such a pleasant thing for me to read something about French food… Thanks!
ReplyDeleteEmma, I loved your opening paragraph! I thought the images you presented were really nice, and I could really see you and your friends enjoying a meal in France! One thing- by the end of the piece, I forgot that you had started out talking about Freedom. I think if you want to keep this as your main point (which I would suggest; I like it!), then maybe using some language and imagery to keep that metaphor going throughout the piece? Not sure how I would do that, but that is my suggestion! Great job !!!
ReplyDeleteYour relation of food and the concept of freedom is delightful! I love your vivid descriptions of Parisian cafe in the perfect afternoon. I felt like I was next to you in this moment of full of sunshine! My mouth was literally watered while reading I was reading your depiction of Orangina and salmon.. YUM YUM YUM!! Your start is really strong, and your whole story flows really well through well-structured and well-developed paragraphs. I totally picture of you were enjoying foreign city.
ReplyDeleteEmma, the descriptions in this are awesome! I specifically love the first paragraph of the piece and the way you describe the food in general. I thought you made a great connection between the food and freedom. I kind of wanted a more-detailed description of the cafe because you explain what type of cafe you are looking for, but then not much about the place you actually pick. Awesome job!
ReplyDeleteEmma! This is beautiful! With salmon, Orangina, cool breeze, best friends and freedom altogether in Paris, it sounds perfect! As other people mentioned above, I really like how you had put freedom and your perfect meal together. Especially, your description of salmon sounds so, so good. I really wish I knew where this cafe is so that if I get to visit Paris, I could go and try this salmon :) Just a quick suggestion, I really like your opening too. But I think it could become stronger, if you made a repetition with "Freedom," instead of "It" as your subject. Great job! See you in the workshop!
ReplyDeleteSo sorry Emma - I'm not sure how I missed commenting on your piece! Your excitement of being in France and your enjoyment of the meal at the cafe really comes through. I think the theme of freedom fits well in your account of this experience, but I want to know more about the lack of freedom that you must have felt somehow before your travel. Also, maybe you could connect having an relaxed meal that you had to wait for to your theme of freedom. Charming story!
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